I’m about 3,000 into Spider-Girl 15, but for the last couple of days I haven’t been that happy with the way the current scene is playing out. I made a decision just a second ago to rewrite, but that means losing a fair chunk of it – and then I figured I’d just share a paragraph I’m cutting.
Looking around, she saw one of the guards coming back toward her as he made a circuit. Slowly, she crossed her legs, lifting them up so that her hemline slid down, revealing more of her stockings and even a touch of garter. Sure enough, the guard noticed, slowing down to look at her. With her mouth taped, Betty had to make her eyes do most of the work; she gave him her best come-hither stare, and come hither he did. He stopped right in front of her as she uncrossed her legs then re-crossed them, surprising herself at how good the stockings felt. The guard leaned down towards her, putting one hand on her leg, sliding it up the fabric.
Like I said, it’s cut… don’t worry, there will be plenty of stuff to compensate.
Bugger-all feedback on issue 14, by the way. What, did everyone hate the Dynamic Duo?
January 13, 2008 at 12:40 am
Whoops, actually the chapter was quite good.
M.B.
January 15, 2008 at 10:19 pm
been out of town for about a week, but the new ish is great, GW. can’t wait for more.
JF
January 15, 2008 at 10:43 pm
I swear, the two of you are like Laurel and Hardy. I’ll have to start calling you the Anonymous Brothers.
Anyway, thank you both for the comments… next issue isn’t too far away, I hope.